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2015上海中考英语作文3例范文(附加分亮点分析)

  范文+解析
 
  范文1及点评:
 
  I want to invent a flying car
 
  It is not uncommon to meet traffic problems and serious air pollution in big city. It is a must to have a plan to improve the serious condition.
 
  I get an idea to design my own flying machine like a car which can drive well in the street as well as fly between the high rises to avoid the traffic jam. What’s more, when it is moving ,it can transform the motion energy into electricity to drive the engine. Thus, it is possible to save a lot of fuel and reduce the air pollution. It is of great use to solve the problems of traffic jam and air pollution ,and even save the natural resource.
 
  Bright idea can only be achieved with the determination and courage. I believe my idea will turn a new leaf of future life.
 
  —新东方优能中考英语左丽娜老师
 
  精彩亮点分析:
 
  亮点一:高分短语
 
  亮点二:itisamust活用高频词
 
  亮点三:定语从句描述自己设计的汽车
 
  亮点四:高分短语
 
  亮点五:beofgreatuse名词结构更高端
 
  亮点六:被动语态,丰富句式
 
  亮点七:turnanewleafoffuturelife翻开未来生活的新篇章
 
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